Seeking feedback on Sample Adventure

[greenknight]

Hi all!

I'm looking for some constructive criticism from the forum about a sample adventure...

For our first book, which is a Core Rules book for the Moebius Adventures RPG system, I wanted to include a sample adventure with some sample characters so that players and GMs can get a better feel for how things work.

I've posted the sample adventure up on the blog site. Here's the link: http://blog.moebiusadventures.com/2007/09/20/looking-for-feedback-on-sample-adventure/

Please take a look and provide any comments back to me as soon as you can... I'd like to get Draft 3 (hopefully final) going soon so I can have a copy out to our playtesters the first couple of weeks of October.

Thanks in advance!
--Fitz
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