Hello,

Yaaaayy! This was another of the very few games which, upon reading, I sat right up and said "Winner, winner!" It was also the only Ronnies entry which had me scrambling to generate a player-character before I was done reading the text.

I'm talking about Nathan Russell's Space Rat: The Adventures of Jack Cosmos. Dude. This game is fucking hilarious, the system is tremendously elegant, and on top of that, it's damn near playable right outta the box.

All right, let's talk about that system. It looks standard, right? You have a buncha score values down the left-hand side, a buncha difficulties across the top, and you roll 2d6 hoping to get on the good side of a classic diagonal chart. I was already groaning, expecting a bevy of skills and advantages that added bonuses to rolls in a niche-y fashion. But then! It turns out that skills only modify how you go into the chart, not how you use it, which makes play much, much simpler.

Except that this explanation isn't simple or clear. Let me start over. See, if you have skills and specialties and gear, you get "off the diagonal" on that chart, to the rightward/upward side, and in a way which doesn't permit fixing/breaking the system. You get better chances of succeeding for a fair price. So far so good; that beats 99% of the traditional game design out there right away.

The trouble is, in this game, that just puts you in the same tier as the other Femme Babes, and damn them, Jack might end up liking them better than you! So now we look at the cool-ass reward system, which is composed of Luck and Attention Stars. Attention Stars basically just improve your position relative to the score/difficulty diagonal, that's easy. Luck, on the other hand, becomes the rivalry-mechanic - either beating the difficulty table outright, or screwing with another Femme Babe's chances when she's really strategized her way into an Attention-Star-getting situation.

It's faaaaantastic. The reward system tweaks the two clear "ends" of the resolution system, and it's tied straight into the two key words as well as into the system in a totally easy-to-use way. The metagame mechanic, the reward, and the resources are all the same thing (Attention Stars), and the rivalry-mechanic turns it into more than just do, acquire, and spend, to do again. This is role-playing design.

I have a few suggestions.

1. (Easy one) I suggest that player-consensus is required for getting a coolness bonus. That's a tough call - you gotta wow the competition themselves in order to get the bonus. Does it seem unlikely to you, in that people would essentially be going against their own advantage? Lots of play-experience in other systems suggests otherwise to me. Trust me; try it.

2. This one's really important; it constitutes my only serious criticism of the game, and it's central. Jack needs to be rewritten. He may not even be well-suited to be run as a character at all. If he is, then his Mind ought to be Abysmal, by the way ...

Either way, though, the game text must explain how how he causes game-scenarios to occur, and how that prompts the specific prep and the specific situations that begin a session of play. Nathan, I strongly suspect that you would do this without even thinking about it, and would even wonder how any sane person could get confused about it. That's because explaining what's automatic and obvious to you is the single most difficult element of designing and publishing an RPG, especially a good one.

Clearly Jack's peccadilloes are easy to come up with: getting captured, passing the buck, getting lost, getting arrested, trying out an interesting new space-herb, and so on. But how are they established, how are adventures begun, what happens? When my players clutch their character sheets and look at me expectantly for the very first time, what do I say?

Now, I have a few guesses and (I hope) inspirations. But that doesn't excuse the fact that this information must be present in the game text.

3. A related point: "going out to dinner with Jack" is totally lame as the reward for the Attention Star victor of the moment. Dude - you gotta give something more, and it's gotta tie right into scenario prep. My call is to have that character begin the next scenario arm-in-arm with Jack, embroiled in whatever situation he's in. See? She's on the ground floor of the scenario! Not only that, if Jack gets captured or lost or decides to catch a porno matinee, she's the one on the ground, and the others gotta scramble! Ha! Take that!

4. I don't think I need to clarify to anyone who's read the rules that you have an amazing hand at producing Cosmos Jack book prose. Here's what I suggest as well: that a major part of play focus on referencing old works and creating excerpts for (whoops, I mean "from") new ones. And that ties into the real point of play - whether your Femme Babe is just a walk-on in the present novel, or whether she's the real hero! We know from your excerpts and game text that the Femme Babes are the heroes. The question is whether mine is, in play, and why.

Heh-hehhhh ... sex-positivism satirical feminism raises its wickedly-grinning, hooded head ... "Can a deluded bimbo be a heroic woman of consequence?" Ah, Premise, I love it when you tease me like that.

If the Ronnies had a first place, this game would be it for September.

Best,
Ron

P.S. You gotta love the Hero Machine. One of the finest time-sinks on the internet.

Oh yeah!

Nathan, if you're reading this, then email me fast at sorcerer@sorcerer-rpg.com. I don't have contact info for you, and that means no money, if you don't.

Aaaaaah, yesss... of all the other entries, this is the one that made me say, "uh, oh" when I thought there would only be one winner.  I really, really liked this game -- it was one of only two that I would seriously consider playing (that's more a comment on my taste than on workmanship, though).  Mad props to you, Nathan.

Yeah, Space Rat is great.

I'd say its the best offering from this first Ronnies contest.
Although I like Cutthroat and Black Widows a lot too.

I'm amazed that Nathan knocked it out in a day, much kudos!

Incidentally, Jack Cosmos is a perfect example of a Munch-Mausen, complete with tales of femme babe conquests!

I need to get the hero machine, it looks like a lot of fun...

Finally, an excuse to generate piles of action babes with Heromachine without guilt.

I loooove the bimbo-centric premise. I'm amazed that no game has touched this before.

From the current illustration, I totally do not buy into Jack's sex appeal. I am sure a more convincing depiction of a rat-man lothario could be found, but "furries" frightens me and I shall delve not into this.

I am impressed that the page layout is actually set up for duplex printing. I hate it when PDFs don't consider that I might actually produce a hard copy.

Jack Cosmos is teh roxxor.

It's a beautiful game. I love the backbiting play. My favourite game, apart from indie games of course, is Paranoia, and this reminds me of that.

My one worry is that it wouldn't hold up for more than a few sessions. It looks like tremendous fun, but there's not much to make me want to play the same character for a campaign. Is there any room for overarching plots that span several games? Something like that?

Graham

Well see, that's what I'm after.

If it turns out that the various adventures can seen as excerpts from one or more "books," then the questions about (a) who the leading lady really is and (b) what kind of a hero is she, can emerge.

The neat thing is that the answers to (a) and (b) are not necessarily answered simply by who gets the most Attention Stars. So yeah, they are long-term play based answers.

Best,
Ron

Man!  Don't I feel like the cat that just swallowed the canary.  Or the Femme Babe that just won Jack's heart (for the moment...).  Thanks for the positive feedback people.  I really didn't expect any kind of honorable mention, let alone be a winner.  I just set out to create a game that I would want to play - one I knew my gaming buddies might get a laugh out of.  And wasn't I surprised to find this thread!  My wife is expecting our second child in the next couple of weeks, so I've been a bit (read - A LOT) distracted - I couldn't even find the thread with the Ronnie feedback!

Anyways, my thoughts (and maybe answers) on Space Rat.

Ron wrote:
1. (Easy one) I suggest that player-consensus is required for getting a coolness bonus. That's a tough call - you gotta wow the competition themselves in order to get the bonus. Does it seem unlikely to you, in that people would essentially be going against their own advantage? Lots of play-experience in other systems suggests otherwise to me. Trust me; try it.

Ron wrote:
2. This one's really important; it constitutes my only serious criticism of the game, and it's central. Jack needs to be rewritten. He may not even be well-suited to be run as a character at all. If he is, then his Mind ought to be Abysmal, by the way ...

Either way, though, the game text must explain how how he causes game-scenarios to occur, and how that prompts the specific prep and the specific situations that begin a session of play. Nathan, I strongly suspect that you would do this without even thinking about it, and would even wonder how any sane person could get confused about it. That's because explaining what's automatic and obvious to you is the single most difficult element of designing and publishing an RPG, especially a good one.

Clearly Jack's peccadilloes are easy to come up with: getting captured, passing the buck, getting lost, getting arrested, trying out an interesting new space-herb, and so on. But how are they established, how are adventures begun, what happens? When my players clutch their character sheets and look at me expectantly for the very first time, what do I say?

Now, I have a few guesses and (I hope) inspirations. But that doesn't excuse the fact that this information must be present in the game text.

Ron wrote:
3. A related point: "going out to dinner with Jack" is totally lame as the reward for the Attention Star victor of the moment. Dude - you gotta give something more, and it's gotta tie right into scenario prep. My call is to have that character begin the next scenario arm-in-arm with Jack, embroiled in whatever situation he's in. See? She's on the ground floor of the scenario! Not only that, if Jack gets captured or lost or decides to catch a porno matinee, she's the one on the ground, and the others gotta scramble! Ha! Take that!

Ron wrote:
4. I don't think I need to clarify to anyone who's read the rules that you have an amazing hand at producing Cosmos Jack book prose. Here's what I suggest as well: that a major part of play focus on referencing old works and creating excerpts for (whoops, I mean "from") new ones. And that ties into the real point of play - whether your Femme Babe is just a walk-on in the present novel, or whether she's the real hero! We know from your excerpts and game text that the Femme Babes are the heroes. The question is whether mine is, in play, and why.

Joe wrote:
I'd say its the best offering from this first Ronnies contest.
Although I like Cutthroat and Black Widows a lot too.

I'm amazed that Nathan knocked it out in a day, much kudos!

Graham wrote:
It's a beautiful game. I love the backbiting play. My favourite game, apart from indie games of course, is Paranoia, and this reminds me of that.

My one worry is that it wouldn't hold up for more than a few sessions. It looks like tremendous fun, but there's not much to make me want to play the same character for a campaign. Is there any room for overarching plots that span several games? Something like that?

Hi Nathan!

1. On the "cool moment," we agree entirely. Whenever everyone goes wow! great! cracks up, or whatever, that's a cool moment, and the Femme Babe gets the bonus. This is precisely the same rule as in Sorcerer, so I'm all about that stuff.

2. We are also totally on the same page about Jack. He's a plot device, not played as an entity in the same sense as a Femme Babe, and the points describing him are for laughs only.

3. Actually, I think our points of view about the beginnings of adventures aren't very far off. I don't think you have to provide hundreds of specific examples, so much as nail down the principles one follows for prep. Here's how I'd see it, currently.

a) The 'Babe who ended with the most Attention Stars last time is currently with Jack on an adventure. The others are not - they may or may not already be in Jack's entourage, or they might be totally on their own, or whatever, but they aren't his "companion" of the moment.

b) Jack does something outrageously stupid and/or has something unlucky happen to him; he disappears off the map. A variety of aspects of the situation approach desperation - either he was supposed to be stopping something dangerous, or he's needed elsewhere, or whatever.

c) Femme Babes go into action! After that, given only the most minimal (but necessary) prep regarding bad guys and ambiguous guys and anything that imaginably could have been in the Flash Gordon movie (whether it was or wasn't), play will then write itself.

4. I think the "mini-series" approach makes most sense anyway. My suggestion is that its length and scope and content be enough for people to write up excerpts from what is obviously a novel. Again, that doesn't mean that play actually has to produce the whole thing, nor (ever!) should the GM actually conceive of the novel as a whole first. All he does is provide bad guys, ambiguous guys, etc (see above). I could see six or seven rocking sessions emerge from this, with some awesome excerpts, very easily.

Time for playtesting and a new draft!!

Best,
Ron