I'm trying to create a game system that focuses on telling a story moreso than killing ogres and taking their loot.  Unfortunately, I don't have a lot of experience with sitting down and telling a story that plays by the rules.  Does anyone have any suggestions for where to begin?

Well, my first question is, "What kind of story?"

I think there are a lot of games which put the focus on producing solid stories, but you're going to have to get more specific than that to get good feedback.

Generally, some games that do this: My Life with Master (the specific scene types, and built-in storyline), Shock: (the Protagonist|Antagonist division, and mutually-possible stakes setting), The Pool (drawing character traits from backstories, simple mechanics that don't clutter the story), The Shadow of Yesterday (Keys, which put the focus onto the things you want to see happen).

But... those all facilitate "telling stories" in very different ways, and you'd need to talk more about what you want to see, in order to get any useful feedback.

Also... posting to Actual Play with some of the things you've found dissatisfying might be REALLY useful.

Or posting to Actual Play with the things you've found satisfying.  Either one (or both!) is good.

I support Joe's statement:  You can't make rules that will help you tell just any story, ever.  It's the same way that you can't make rules that will help you play just any ball-game, ever.  The rules that help you play soccer would get in the way of playing baseball.  The rules that help you tell a superhero story will get in the way of telling a survival horror story.

Aha...I see the error of my ways.

Well, I'd like to make a storytelling ruleset that pushes the characters into a horror story...the way you'd push someone into a gradually narrowing chute until they wedged in there real good.

I'm going for a horror story.  When I tried to create a narrativist game, I somehow ended up creating a fun little pocket epic.  Instead of week-long character creation, I made a convenient little system where players generate characters by picking skills, backgrounds, personality quirks, etc. from a list that automatically generated stats based on how you mix-and-match the skills you want.

By some miraculous accident of design, the thing balanced.

However, it was a long way from having any strong storytelling elements.  I blame this on never fully understanding GNS theory (I imagine that I should have argued more about it) and of course Dungeons and Dragons.  As an indie developer, I am required to have a vendetta against Wizards of the Coast for no specific reason.

One shall stand, one shall fall.

Anyway, I'm trying to encapsulate the elements of a good horror story into a game format.  After creating a strange little hybrid system capable of managing short, pick-up-and-go roleplay, I want to make the game that I didn't make when I stumbled across something that worked for the first time as a developer.  Yes...I was distracted by something shiny and now I'm trying to remedy that.

So far, I've got a kind of sleepover RPG where players take on the personas of kids, each living in a house that everyone on their blcok assumes to be haunted.  The child holding the sleepover is the GM and the other kids are...well, kids.  They get benefits from living in a haunted house that ensure their survival when spending the night at another one.  At the end of the night, the survivors go home and there's a new sleepover the following week.

I liked it because it's literally a game where players sit around and tell ghost stories with a light RPG element as well.  However, it's a soft jab compared to what I'm really trying to do, a game that has the players collectively creating a story that has the potential to be genuinely terrifying.  That'll be the knockout punch.

So...where do I go from here?

make ghosts, give them personality and push the reasons why they are ghosts. give them powers and cunning to set up traps and attacks. either to scare or to harm. then set the ghost loose in the house. then have the kids interact with the ghost, in fact if one player was the ghost, i'd go that direcvtion. then just let them duke it out till morning.

I like that.  I'm going to use that format.

Here's your focus:

I'd like to make a storytelling ruleset that pushes the characters into a horror story [...] a game that has the players collectively creating a story that has the potential to be genuinely terrifying.

Allright...actually, this could vastly improve my "Outatowners" concept that I hadn't the chops (I'd been on the Forge all of a week with good ideas and no experience) to develop at the time.  I think I was really onto something because everyone really wanted to make scenarios for it and here I was...mechanic-less.

Pardon if this is a rehash for anyone, but the concept was pretty cool.  Players were a group of strangers in a strange town, completely unaware of the local lore, who end up in exactly the places that no one goes after dark.  As the game progresses, the players slowly uncover the local legends and hopefully get out alive.

This one had promise because it actually achieved a level of fear by dropping the players into a ghost story without a compass.  In order to figure out the story and get out alive, they had to open creaky doors, go alone into the woods, and shout "Hello, is anyone there?" into the darkness.

Problem was, I didn't know how to make "cool idea" into "something playable".  Maybe this time around, I can do so.

the key to makeing something playable, out of some great ideas. is to be willing build a system "through" your ideas, rather than around the. IE, make comprimizes in both the idea area and the system ideda, without loosing the prim focus of the idea. maybe your should write down what you want to acheive, and what can be discarded if needs be. and play the cheese out of anything you come up with. do that until you have something worthwhile.