As promised, here's my power 19 for my new game, ''Fallen'' which uses some material and ideas from my previous idea, ''Obscure''. The game is about fallen angels that left heaven for some reason(there can be multiple reasons, the one discussed in the setting is that although Demons are roaming the world, God does nothing about it. Free will and all that. Some angels decide to fall in order to be able to help humanity, even as mere mortals). The main themes of the game are justice, punishment and revenge, at least as far as the storylines go. The angels need a host. When they enter a body, the two personalities merge and become a completely new one, with the angel personality being dominant(there is no duality in the character though. It's a new, completely unique personality). What remains of the mortal is the main characteristics of their personality(such as attachment to loved ones, especially dominant traits, etc).

1.)What is your game about?
‘’Fallen’’ is about voluntarily fallen angels kicking demon criminal ass in a modern setting. It's about imperfect powerful beings trying to redeem themselves or simply try and help humanity. It's also about exploring the themes of revenge, justice and punishment.

2.) What do the characters do?
They act as an ad hoc judge jury and executioner for demon (and non-demon) criminals that would otherwise go free due to their skill to avoid the mortal justice system. At the same time, they keep up a ‘’front’’ of mortal life and make sure their loved ones don't come to harm.

3.) What do the players (including the GM if there is one) do?
The GM handles the world and the NPCs.

4.) How does your setting (or lack thereof) reinforce what your game is about?
The setting is modern, a world where demons are slowly taking over the darker sides of humanity (the criminals and ‘’evil’’ people) and making the world a much worse place for everyone. These demons are the adversaries.

5.) How does the Character Creation of your game reinforce what your game is about?
Character creation is focused on skills, attributes and powers. These are the tools the characters will be using in the face of adversity. Initially, the player will be asked to answer a few questions about his character, such as: general concept, previous position in heaven, reason for the ‘’fall’’, the host chosen and possibly a few more. This makes the character a bit clearer for the player and adds some background. Archetypes can be used if the player doesn't feel like coming up with all aspects himself.

6.) What types of behaviours/styles of play does your game reward (and punish if necessary)?
There are no rewards for style of play or behaviour. You can either be a good guy that goes around saving people, or a bad guy killing with little evidence or reason.

7.) How are behaviours and styles of play rewarded or punished in your game?
There are no rewards for style of play or behaviour. You can either be a good guy that goes around saving people, or a bad guy killing with little evidence or reason.

8.) How are the responsibilities of narration and credibility divided in your game?
The GM narrates and controls the environment and the NPCs. Players control their characters.

9.) What does your game do to command the players' attention, engagement, and participation? (i.e. What does the game do to make them care?)
It offers you what you need to create an interesting character with depth and personality. Sending that character into danger (both physical and mental) make the game interesting.

10.) What are the resolution mechanics of your game like?
No system yet

11.) How do the resolution mechanics reinforce what your game is about?
No system yet.

12.) Do characters in your game advance? If so, how?
They will advance by gaining experience points with which they can buy skills/abilities/powers.

13.) How does the character advancement (or lack thereof) reinforce what your game is about?
Well being able to buy additional powers or get better at existing skills/abilities/powers makes your character better equipped to deal with criminal scum.

14.) What sort of product or effect do you want your game to produce in or for the players?
I want the players to feel compassion for crime victims and rage towards the perpetrators. I want them to feel like going outside with a trunk full of guns and kill every demon they can find. Then I want them to doubt their very nature, after they've just killed a demon begging for mercy.

15.) What areas of your game receive extra attention and color? Why?
The horrible nature of violence is one. Although the game is largely about outright killing horrible horrible demons, violence is in itself a horrible act.
Besides that, the imperfect nature of a fallen angel merged with a mortal and the implications this kind of existence entails is key to the game.

16.) Which part of your game are you most excited about or interested in? Why?
I'm really excited about the possibilities of character creation (besides the fact that you're a fallen angel, anything goes. You can make low-key, gritty characters with deep background stories and depth, or just use an archetype to create an ass kicking angel) and the themes presented in the game(nature of violence and revenge, guilt, justice).

17.) Where does your game take the players that other games can't, don't, or won't?
Being able to create a rather unique character is one of the pros. Although you can do that in a lot of games, this particular angle and game theme hasn't been done to my knowledge. I guess it's a game where you can feel justified in killing as many as possible with no guilt. Of course, that's a thin line to walk and you'll find even that murderous demon scum resides in a host that has a wife and kids. Are you prepared to take their(admittedly, shell of a) husband and father from them?

18.) What are your publishing goals for your game?
I currently plan to publish a pdf.

19.) Who is your target audience?
Definitely adults, quite possibly experienced gamers looking to invest time in a game either too shallow or too deep.

So this is it. It's a bit rough around the edges and it doesn't contain all the information about the game but I'm hoping the main ingredients are here.
To request some more specific feedback:
1. System. I hate systems. I mean I like playing games, but when it comes to creating one, I'm horrible. Any ideas on what to use?
2. If you think this game sounds alot like an already existing one, please tell me which one and why. I'm aware of In Nomine, Nephilim and Demon:TF. I think the angle is different and when I've written the game it will be clear why exactly that is.
3. Does the game sound too violent/naive/preschool? I want to make sure the point of the game is violence can turn you into a monster like the ones you are hunting, not that it's cool to shoot people in the face.

That's all I think. Thanks in advance!

My first reaction is that I am attracted by the setting and themes of the game as well as what I assume is the metagame explanation for the blending of two minds into a distinct third being that is nevertheless bound by chains of memory to the two component-but-lost minds.

My second reaction is to this:

northerain wrote: 7.) How are behaviours and styles of play rewarded or punished in your game?
There are no rewards for style of play or behaviour. You can either be a good guy that goes around saving people, or a bad guy killing with little evidence or reason.

Daniel wrote:

I don't know that it's possible for a game not to reward certain behaviors or patterns of behavior. I can't imagine how this would work. From the rest of your post, it seems to me that one of the places of narrative riches in this setting is the inner conflict of the protagonists: I'm fighting crime and evil, and I don't want to "catch it," so to speak. I think a temptation mechanic is appropriate for something like this - but only if this tension is an important one to you.

Now, if you value a sort of engine-unity in your design and if you want to incorporate something like "If you only knew the power of the Dark Side" temptations in your game as an important mechanic, I'd figure out the temptation mechanic first and then deduce the rest of the mechanics from that. This might be a way to keep your temptation mechanic from feeling like it's "tacked on," since this kind of temptation won't constitute the majority of fortune determinations that will occur.

Ok, what you have right now is a concept, and as such Power 19 is not as much something you need to "fill in", but things you should perhaps privately think about. Also, you say you do not have a system yet, while talking about attributes, skills and cool powerz. Why lock yourself to that approach, if you seriously have not considered the system yet?

If you want to take your concept for a spin, I suggest taking something like the FATE system, since I have heard a lot of good things about the way aspects work in FATE. Graft some concept-specific color on top of FATE, and play it out, see how it feels.

That said, it seems that your concept is intriguing, but you are selling it short in terms of the kinds of play it could produce. Here are some thoughts:

If you just ask the players to generate a character who is the result of a melding between an angel and a mortal, you move a potentially interesting part of play from actual play to "pre-play", i.e. you ask the players to just describe something that they could actually experience, through play. How about you first create an angel, and play out two scenes: a) one that explains how that particular angel gets fed up with the celestial indifference, and decides personal sacrifice is called for, and b) another where the angel does whatever needs to be done to be cast down to earth. These scenes should be sufficient to shed some light on the personality of the angel. Then you create a mortal, and play out a scene that illustrates why that particular angel would choose this particular mortal as the host: Is the mortal most deserving and righteous? Just dispensable, a morally bankrupt person that the world can live without? Most cut from the rest of the world, so that no one notices the change in his or her behavior? Maybe the angel takes the utilitarian approach, and selects a host with the most earthly resources, to make the fight easier? This scene or scenes would also be crucial to actively show in play the relationships and environment of the mortal character.

Then you do the melding of the two entities. You could have a set number of traits or slots to fill in in the resulting character, and then you must pick and choose from the angel's and mortal's traits. You can't have them all, you have to have some from both, etc.

I think a system for this concept should rely heavily on relationships, perhaps not for combat, but for everything else, and all the demons the fallen encounter would somehow be tied to those relationships, perhaps through possession, and the relationships would constantly be risked.

Or something.

Hi Mikael, I'll try and address the points you made.

Mikael wrote:
Ok, what you have right now is a concept, and as such Power 19 is not as much something you need to "fill in", but things you should perhaps privately think about. Also, you say you do not have a system yet, while talking about attributes, skills and cool powerz. Why lock yourself to that approach, if you seriously have not considered the system yet?

Mikael wrote:
If you want to take your concept for a spin, I suggest taking something like the FATE system, since I have heard a lot of good things about the way aspects work in FATE. Graft some concept-specific color on top of FATE, and play it out, see how it feels.

Mikael wrote:
That said, it seems that your concept is intriguing, but you are selling it short in terms of the kinds of play it could produce. Here are some thoughts:

If you just ask the players to generate a character who is the result of a melding between an angel and a mortal, you move a potentially interesting part of play from actual play to "pre-play", i.e. you ask the players to just describe something that they could actually experience, through play. How about you first create an angel, and play out two scenes: a) one that explains how that particular angel gets fed up with the celestial indifference, and decides personal sacrifice is called for, and b) another where the angel does whatever needs to be done to be cast down to earth. These scenes should be sufficient to shed some light on the personality of the angel. Then you create a mortal, and play out a scene that illustrates why that particular angel would choose this particular mortal as the host: Is the mortal most deserving and righteous? Just dispensable, a morally bankrupt person that the world can live without? Most cut from the rest of the world, so that no one notices the change in his or her behavior? Maybe the angel takes the utilitarian approach, and selects a host with the most earthly resources, to make the fight easier? This scene or scenes would also be crucial to actively show in play the relationships and environment of the mortal character.

Mikael wrote:
Then you do the melding of the two entities. You could have a set number of traits or slots to fill in in the resulting character, and then you must pick and choose from the angel's and mortal's traits. You can't have them all, you have to have some from both, etc.

I think a system for this concept should rely heavily on relationships, perhaps not for combat, but for everything else, and all the demons the fallen encounter would somehow be tied to those relationships, perhaps through possession, and the relationships would constantly be risked.

northerain wrote:

Mikael wrote:
If you want to take your concept for a spin, I suggest taking something like the FATE system, since I have heard a lot of good things about the way aspects work in FATE. Graft some concept-specific color on top of FATE, and play it out, see how it feels.

I'm not really sold on FATE. I have to admit I'm a bit traditional(hell, even DitV wasn't that easy for me to grasp, although I love that game to death)

I like FATE, the ''problem'' is I don't think it will do what I want it to do. It's personal preference, it's highly probably my game is perfect for FATE, but in the end, you have to make a game that first of all, you'd like to play right?
I did want to ask something though. If I'm planning to actually publish my game, isn't it a faux pas to use a system basically stolen from another rpg?

northerain wrote:
I did want to ask something though. If I'm planning to actually publish my game, isn't it a faux pas to use a system basically stolen from another rpg?

Yeah I know about Fate(although I didn't know Fate v3 was available). But you mentioned DitV, thus my question.

If you published a game with the DitV system in it, whole cloth? Yeah, "faux pas" is a decent word for that. But you aren't to publishing yet. You aren't even near it.

If you just jump in and play in this world you're setting forth, with any system, I think you'll find that you learn a tremendous amount about the specific systemic needs of this setting. In short, any system you jump in with now is either gonna get thrown out and replaced with something new, or change to the point where it's unrecognizable.

You're right about that. This is my first game so I'm not really that experienced. My main problem at the moment is that I'm stuck without a gaming group to playtest or even discuss. Sometime in July I'll be seeing my friends and I expect to make alot of progress then.