Hello.  This is my first post at the Forge, I hope one of many.  I'm hoping to get some feedback on a design I've been working on for far too long.  It started as a fairly traditional, tactically-oriented design, which I have been struggling to make into a story game.  But I'm having problems knowing where to focus, and what sort of mechanics I should be using.

Let me tell you about it.  Gangs of the Factory Zone is a sort of Space Western in the vein of anime & manga series' like Trigun and Battle Angel Alita.  The primary setting is a terraformed and re-colonized Mars, in a sort of industrial area and slum just outside the planet's primary spaceport.  It's the frontier between a heavily cyberpunk world and a mystically charged native culture.

To answer the basic questions:

What's it about?

Gangs is about life in an industrial slum and how to escape it, framed by the question: “What will you do to have a better life?” and considered against a  backdrop of poverty and near-slavery,  crime, vice, colonialism, religious proselytism and persecution, etc.  In a more abstract sense, it's about the downsides of capitalism and globalization, and about the choice between a survival-of-the-fittest mentality and a more cooperative society.

Who are the characters and what do they do?

The characters are “Zeros,” people with no official identity and no real rights; living in the Zone.  They may be disenfranchised immigrants from Earth, displaced native Martians, or people born and raised in the Zone.  They may be affiliated with various groups—including religions, gangs, organized criminals, corporations, and/or the Martian resistance.  In all cases they will have friends and family in the Zone—people who may need protection or may drag the character(s) into tricky situations.  Over the course of a game, the characters will have to find the best way to survive and thrive and see where it takes them—whether they become citizens and move into the city, leave for the boom towns or native settlements in the countryside, or stay in the zone as a big-shot of some kind.

The characters will have various career roles; native martial artists, psychic gunslingers, cyborg soldiers, fixers, hackers, shamans, faith healers, witches, etc.  I'm concerned that too many character types will distract from the situation of the story.

What do the players do?

I'm hoping to distribute a fair chunk of the narrative responsibility among the players; but there will be a GM / Story Guide with facilitating role.  More mechanically, character traits & abilities, ethics, and relationships will add up to an overall effectiveness score, called “Edge,” which the players then bet in order to attempt to win in conflicts.  I'm hoping to use a conflict resolution system with Fortune in the Middle, but admittedly, I'm not sure I fully understand these concepts.  Originally I was going for a kind of play by play account of conflicts, but it seems like this might detract from the story element... not sure.

My key concern:

Setting and Character types: are elaborate setting and elaborate character types appropriate for a story game?  Or should it be distilled down and more focused on situation?  In short: is this a good foundation for a story game?  Or is it too involved?

I'm also concerned about the mechanics (mainly: how detailed / involved should the mechanics be?) but I can save that for a later thread.  I don't have a lot of experience with narrativist facilitating games, but I seem to be determined to make one.  Any insight into the process would help immensely.

Thanks in advance,

Andre

I think an abundance of setting can dilute the premise, if the premise isn't too clear to begin with. Speaking of, in terms of the question “What will you do to have a better life?”, what are the options on what you can do? If it's a choice between  baking pies or growing your own garden, you can see there's not really a compelling story there (though in my mind that could be developed into another question, but nm). In the frozen dawn game, here in first thoughts as well, it has 'what you can do' rather neatly built into setting, with a bunch of factions with very different attitudes to technology.

I mean, I'm thinking violence of various varieties against other people may be the various things you can do, but does the book fill that in, or just fill in alot of setting?

"Involved" can be good for a story oriented game. It gives more meat for players to hook into, and gives more opportunities for characters to truly explore different situations and tell stories that are relevant to their concepts.

Games that are too simplistic have a nasty tendency to produce the same story over and over again.

Do you see your setting as being a one shot, or an opportunity for ongoing play?

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And honestly, as lone as you keep in mind the old adage of making sure there is a story hook on every page, then I don't think you can ever have a game that is too detailed.

(Note that many games become too detailed IMHO when they start quoting lists of stats that don't really lure players in, or simply provide new ways to kill things that aren't much different to the old ways of killing things...Yes, I'm looking at you GURP, RIFTS and D&D).

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On the front of varied character types, it can work, if the relationships between them work. If the existence of one type totally fubars another, (for example by just taking all their conflicts and themes and trumping them, or otherwise rendering them a non-issue) then obviously you can't have both! Equally you may find that certain characters just push in too dissimilar a direction to put them together.

Presumably you originally created those different types for tactical reasons, do any of them have specific story interest to you? Ie could you just play with one type for the whole game and be happy with it? If not you could adjust it to give it some depth.

In terms of the detail level of scenes, one way to think about it is to consider what you want to have happened in say a two hour session; one big scene? A few shorter ones? And how much should the character or situation have changed by the end of that? Then you could decide how much you want to have change over those scenes.

Another way to go about it is to consider the rate of change from another angle, asking "what will the players want to know?". If you imagine that there is a bit of tension and then release as the mechanics are implemented, what is the thing they should be worried/curious/excited about? Is it always the same "size" thing, and if not do you want to handle conflicts of different importance differently?

Andre wrote:
it's about the downsides of capitalism and globalization, and about the choice between a survival-of-the-fittest mentality and a more cooperative society.

Hey guys,

Thanks for responding (and so quickly!) and for humouring my insanity.  I apologize for the long post, but I hope I can address your questions:

Callan—yes, that's my worry; that too much setting will dilute the premise.  In terms of finding a better life and what you can do... well, violence and the threat of violence is a major theme, but it could also take the form of organizing the community in political protest, or becoming a spiritual leader; or just working hard, or becoming a criminal, to gather enough money / favours / connections to move out of the place, or stay and be a bigshot.  The story doesn't necessarily have to end there, but there will come a time when the characters have effectively beaten the zone, at least in a personal way. 

Michael—The setting is definitely designed for ongoing adventure.  I have plans for stories written in this setting, including a novel, if I ever get around to writing it.  There's a lot to explore in terms of the clash between Earth and Martian cultures; corporate domination, religious conflict, the impact of new technologies, and so forth.  I guess, as you say, if I can find a way to turn those details into story hooks, then it will be that much better.  Also—I know exactly what you mean about Rifts :D

Josh—actually, the character types haven't been balanced at all; they're all there due to story interest.  In the original system there were no types or templates; just different abilities you could purchase at character creation.  That's been part of my dilemma: character classes or free-form skills?  Classes or templates give a structure that I think is important, but I don't want that to go too heavy and end up with something really restrictive, like D&D.  I think my solution will be a number of broad career-based skills, like “gunslinger” or “medic” (a character might have three or four at most), combined with a “power” template, such as “psychic” or “cyborg” and so on.  Then you can add a handful of special techniques (e.g. “whirlwind kick” or “alluring smile”) to round the character out.  Then again, I guess that doesn't really tell me how the characters are going to relate to each other up front.

JoyWriter wrote:
In terms of the detail level of scenes, one way to think about it is to consider what you want to have happened in say a two hour session; one big scene? A few shorter ones? And how much should the character or situation have changed by the end of that? Then you could decide how much you want to have change over those scenes.

JoyWriter wrote:
What about putting that conflict between the actual players in the game, perhaps with a cooperation/trust mechanic or a tradeof between money/pay links and community?

JoyWriter wrote:
What interests you in fortune in the middle?

yes, that's my worry; that too much setting will dilute the premise.  In terms of finding a better life and what you can do... well, violence and the threat of violence is a major theme, but it could also take the form of organizing the community in political protest, or becoming a spiritual leader; or just working hard, or becoming a criminal, to gather enough money / favours / connections to move out of the place, or stay and be a bigshot.  The story doesn't necessarily have to end there, but there will come a time when the characters have effectively beaten the zone, at least in a personal way. 

A Comment:
Callan S., i may have misunderstood you, but a clarification may be in order anyway.
Who says it has to be at a moral cost that the Beating of the Zone comes to pass?

Andre, you say the inspiration is mixed from Trigun and Battle Angel Alita: As far as i've read those Mangas, it is more a question of remaining true to ones self (And your own morals, more or less) while doing what has to be done.
There, i think, is where parts of the "Fighting" occurs: will the characters be able to remain True to themselves? Will their morals change(or not)?
However, this is often a question of Narration while playing, rather than following the Rules.

Also, your solution on the question of Skill and such is as good as any.
            Catelf

Hey guys—I really want to thank you for this—you're really making me think a lot about what I'm trying to do, and it's seriously appreciated :D

Callan: I'm grateful for your gamist radar; as I need to get away from my Rifts habits.

Callan wrote:
While just as premise, it doesn't seem to have any punch - at what (potential) moral cost is it to work hard? At what (potential moral) cost is it to become a spiritual leader? Or criminal?

Catelf wrote:
Andre, you say the inspiration is mixed from Trigun and Battle Angel Alita: As far as i've read those Mangas, it is more a question of remaining true to ones self (And your own morals, more or less) while doing what has to be done.
There, i think, is where parts of the "Fighting" occurs: will the characters be able to remain True to themselves? Will their morals change(or not)?  However, this is often a question of Narration while playing, rather than following the Rules.

What I meant by working hard was putting up with one's very low place in society and turning a blind eye to the injustices all around, while earning barely enough to survive from the factories.  So the moral cost of that is your free will and your pride—not to mention the time it will take to earn what you need.

A life of crime is another option, but it's a slippery slope, and pretty soon you could be doing some very questionable things.  The moral cost there is straightforward—you risk losing any morally upright relationships you have and your life may be  endangered.  Your free will too, if you work for the mafia.

There's always bounty hunting or prize fighting or gambling (on prize fights, usually); but then, like the criminal, you're profiting from destruction and will have to reconcile that somehow.

Finally you can try to inspire or lead the people of the zone to stand up to the various vultures that prey on them, but then you get labeled a troublemaker by the corporations or the organized crime bosses, and you're targeted—putting your life and the lives of your loved ones in danger.  There are also rival religious outfits operating here, some of whom are not above violence to members (and especially leaders) of other faiths. 

All the while, your character is going to have relationships with people who often disapprove of your choices, or who make choices your character disapproves of.  Hopefully, some of these people will be fellow player characters.

I also vote for your skill system, classes end up being too restrictive, even when you have too many options. Now, about relating characters to each other it doesn't have to be that difficult if all share the same objective and that can be easily implemented as a mechanic: make a table with a list of objectives a Zero could have (being a notorious criminal, gain control of the city, etc etc.) and have one of the players roll on it for everybody. That would be the objective they share, every character for their individual motives but that's what got them together in the first place.

I found an old D&D random adventure generator and worked on it to adapt to the setting for my game. The fun thing is this: you can feed this generator with your setting and your players and let them affect the way organizations in your setting clash and gain advantage over each other. Then you keep tracking of the relationships between the party and these organizations and make them react accordingly. In the end you'll have less work to do as a GM and will be able to avoid most of railroading in the narration, since even the GM won't know (or need to know) where the story is going. Give it a thought, it may end being helpful, letting players decide what the game is actually about.

I think that was a good idea by Warrior Monk there, but for another reason:
It enforces the Mood of the Game!
Since it is kind of Dystopian (world gone wrong, more or less), and the population within it may have very little control over their situation, it can be truly proper to let the Players Roll to determine their Objective. However, one can also let each Player roll for the Individual Goal, and then, one of them(perhaps the one with most Leader talents or such) roll for the Uniting Goal.

Thanks for your help, Callan!

Warrior Monk & Catelf:  That's a good idea.  I like the idea of the players influencing the organizations and vice versa, and I did indeed hope to have player character goals drive the story, with minimal need for GM guidance (or even prep), so some random adventure generation may work.  I'm not sure if I want to do a unifying goal, though.  I suppose they need a reason to associate, if I follow traditional party-style play. 

But I've also been pondering play in which the characters don't necessarily have to be together much of the time, or even know each other, necessarily.  That way, the players could take turns playing out scenes that focus more on their individual characters, with the PC's only crossing paths occasionally.  Players whose characters aren't involved in a scene would still have influence over the story, using some as-of-yet-unknown metagame currency or some other mechanism to steer the narrative.  It might be as simple as taking on the roles of important NPC's.  Then, if the PC's do decide to join up as a team, their relationships are formed naturally over time as their separate paths cross.  The only problem is that I have almost no idea how I could make this work, although I know there are games out there that do this.  So, I've only really been pondering it.  It may require quite a lot of setup before playing out each scene.

Andre wrote:
My key concern:

Setting and Character types: are elaborate setting and elaborate character types appropriate for a story game?  Or should it be distilled down and more focused on situation?  In short: is this a good foundation for a story game?  Or is it too involved?

I'm also concerned about the mechanics (mainly: how detailed / involved should the mechanics be?) but I can save that for a later thread.  I don't have a lot of experience with narrativist facilitating games, but I seem to be determined to make one.  Any insight into the process would help immensely.

Thanks in advance,

Andre

Andre wrote:
But I've also been pondering play in which the characters don't necessarily have to be together much of the time, or even know each other, necessarily.  That way, the players could take turns playing out scenes that focus more on their individual characters, with the PC's only crossing paths occasionally.  Players whose characters aren't involved in a scene would still have influence over the story, using some as-of-yet-unknown metagame currency or some other mechanism to steer the narrative.  It might be as simple as taking on the roles of important NPC's.  Then, if the PC's do decide to join up as a team, their relationships are formed naturally over time as their separate paths cross.  The only problem is that I have almost no idea how I could make this work, although I know there are games out there that do this.  So, I've only really been pondering it.  It may require quite a lot of setup before playing out each scene.

I agree.
I dare say, that the problem with other Players getting bored can show up even with 4 and less Players!
I suggests a kind of "Short Games", where a GM + only One Player, possibly two, of the full Group, plays out, and where the other Players do not have to be present!
After a while, the players should be aware of some Main Goal, that is enough to possibly even make them Want to "Band together".
Then, Bring the full Group together.

Only problem there, is that it risk enforcing one as the individual as the GM, which you've said you'd prefer not, or something like that.
This might still work with Rotating GM's, though, but SOMEONE must still be informed of all that has transpired in those "Short Games", in order to collect the threads, and suggest directions for further Shorties, as well as the main ones.
I think it might work: Playtesting is very important here.

Paka wrote:
Do not try to make the best Story Game you can.  Do not try to make the best indie RPG or Forge derived or whatever game you can.

Try to make the best Gangs of the Factory Zone that you can and do it in a way that doesn't leave you broke or risking more than you feel is appropriate.  Everything else is debatable.

Lush, dense setting are absolutely possible and playable.

How does the game drop the players into the setting and/or link the characters to its elements?

This reminds me of a book I need to get back to and finish, Desolation Road by Ian McDonald, about a railside town on Mars.

Warrior wrote:
I'm not saying it's not possibble to implement a mechanic for solo scenes that keeps everybody busy, I found a nice one on "Classroom Deathmach", where each player designates a best friend and a nemesis among the players. Then after every roll he makes, his best friend narrates all positive outcomes and his nemesis narrates all the negative outcomes. I haven't played the game, so I can't tell how good it actually works. If anybody heard of an interesting mechanic that keeps everybody busy on solo scenes, please, I'd also love to know, it would do a lot of good to my pal's game.

Catelf wrote:
Only problem there, is that it risk enforcing one as the individual as the GM, which you've said you'd prefer not, or something like that.
This might still work with Rotating GM's, though, but SOMEONE must still be informed of all that has transpired in those "Short Games", in order to collect the threads, and suggest directions for further Shorties, as well as the main ones.
I think it might work: Playtesting is very important here.