I'm currently working on this game: Caterpillar.

It is a silly game about space pirates, inspired by 3:16 and Poison'd, of course.  The tone, as I mentioned, is quite silly. The mechanics operate the way I hoped (at least in the playtests I've done so far), and the play is fun.  I am a fan.

I would like some feedback, though, on a few aspects of the game.

• Are the rules organized in a comprehensive order/format?
• Does the silly tone of the game come across through the rules as written?
• Does the currency of the game flow in a way that drives interesting play?

I know the game is fun when I play it with my friends, but will that fun translate out of my play group?  Can the game be picked up and played as-is by the average fun-seeker?  That's what I hope to learn from you fine folks.  There are three PDFs linked here, the rules so far, the different character sheets for each kind of pirate, and the examples that will be inserted as sidebars into the final copy.  Let me know what you think!  Thanks, everybody!

The Rules
The Character Sheets
The Examples

Honestly, this looks like a lot of fun. As far as your bullet points:

1. The rules seem to make sense and are laid out in a decent fashion.
2. The game seems most silly when reading about Skulls, looking at sample character names, and perusing the random roll tables.
3. Observing how the currency flows will require play, which I'll try to do soon if you need playtesting done.

Out of curiosity, how often do you plan on Promotions occurring per character? Once per session?

The game, at the very least, is enjoyable enough of a concept to play. I'll give it a shot with some friends and see how it goes. Are there any specific goals you have in mind for playtests?

Thanks for reading!  It's really good to hear that the game sounds fun and appealing to a complete stranger (you).

As far as your questions are concerned:  I expect promotions to happen roughly once every session or so.  Maybe you won't quite get one one session, maybe you'll get two next session, etc.  One thing I did realize after the last playtest, was that I need to shorten the accident track for promotions.  Previous playtests had all the pirates chain-rolling off each other, and one player racked up enough accidents to become an ensign in the first 50 minutes of the game.  So with that, I created the skull boxes to temper the die-rolling, and make sure everyone gets a fair shake and equal spotlight time.  But it means that now the accident track needs to be shortened again to reflect the revised pace of the die rolls.

I would love it if you (and/or anyone) would playtest the game.  I don't know if it would quite fit to post actual plays in this thread or not (or whether they need to go in the AP section of the forums), but I'd love to see some to see how it plays with you.  I'll write up and post some APs here as well, and even post the recording I made of our last session, which was tons of fun.

As far as the goals I'd like to see for playtesting, they are phrased as questions below:

• Does the pacing of the game match up with the promotion system and the BoneTracks of each pirate.  (Does the game promote/kill them too fast or slow?)
• Is the RA able to run a session flying by the seat of his/her pant with no prep? (Are there enough tools to support it?)
• Does the game inherently motivate the players enough to drive the game forward in interesting ways without a Beliefs/Best Interests/Ambitions mechanic?
• What issues or problems did I not foresee yet in my own design and playtests?  (What breaks the game?)

Thanks for your interest, Kyle!  I'll get to posting some actuals plays on here in a bit.

The first playtest:

Characters
Mya: Turquoise Jacket (the Earthling) - She is a lady with a beard
Morgan: Hngh! (the Primer) - He has a secret kitten and infinite ammo.
Nathan: Nokia Qwest-Lockheed (the Fairy) - He has about 20 fake _book accounts (pronounced "space book")

What Happened in the Fiction
The new recruits are arrayed on a stage in the mess hall, just as laid out in the "Starting the Game" section in the book.  When Dugan the NPC goes up to the lectern to address the crew, Hngh! walks up and smacks his head into it, which is a hilarious Primer prank.  We then decide that the standard Primer handshake involves grasping the other's collar and head-butting each other as hard as possible.  This action results in a gigantic brawl, where all the recruits are fighting against each other to prove how cool they are.  Nokia hacks people's _book accounts and tries to defame a poor, hapless Fairy named Compaq Presario.  It goes on for a while and all are accepted, except for the spy who pulls his gun on the captain. 

Hngh! shoots the guy, but keeps having accidents, so the spy stays on his feet for a while, but is eventually taken down.  At that point, the giant head of a Royal Naval Admiral (Enron Hewlett-Packard) appears in the mess hall, just like The Last Starfighter.  He laughs at the crew and reveals that his spy has hidden a tracking device on their ship.  The Caterpillar will be surrounded when it surfaces.  Gasp!  Nokia searches the webbernet and reveals to everyone that Enron has secretly been writing Who's The Boss fanfic for years.  Enron is embarrassed and signs off in a huff.  The captain gets the crew ready for battle, and  sends the new recruits to find the tracking device.

What Happened Around the Table
The first session was a wild success.  It was chaotic in a good way, and full of comedy.  The players all embraced the ideas of declaring new facts about the world, and loved having accidents when they didn't succeed.  The game did need a way to keep all the players a little more balanced in terms of spotlight, however, and Hngh! got a promotion incredibly fast because his player, Morgan, kept rolling and rolling constantly.  The whole session was a little over two hours long, and did an excellent job of fleshing out the setting and the mechanics.  Session two post to come.

Actual Play Session Two:

A New Character
Tim: The Hammer-Polisher (The Rocket) - He has a chimp named Tungsten and a gigantic wrench

What Happened in the Fiction
Turquoise Jacket discovers a secret tracking beacon the size of a table nestled in a Jeffries tube above the kitchen.  She talls Hngh! about it and he shoots at it through the ceiling, but his success becomes complicated as the laser from his bullet narrowly misses Turquoise Jacket.  With the transmitter destroyed, Nokia back-hacks it and declares that Enron Hewlett-Packard and his battleship are hiding inside old earth's hollow moon.  He updates Enron's hacked _book account and broadcasts it to everyone (and gets a friend request from Captain Swallowtail).  The Hammer-Polisher meets and old friend from home (The Pants-Loser) who introduces him to the captain.  There, The Hammer-Polisher reveals his ingenious plan: to "repair" the tracker and send it out through The Deeps on a boarding pod, giving the enemy a false trail.  The Caterpillar will then catch the Navy ship from behind.

The plan goes off swimmingly.  The H-P fixes the beacon and sends it out, but the remote blows up in his hands, prematurely.  The Caterpillar lunges out of The Deeps and finds the enemy battleship right in their sights.  Hngh! brilliantly chooses to ride a torpedo (Dr. Strangelove style) toward the enemy bridge, and fires himself off almost immediately.  The crew engages in battle.  Nokia launches all of the escape pods and pilots them as a single giant organism (like the gore crows in Sabriel, if you've read it).  Turquoise runs the targeting computer, but cocks it all up, having an accident.  Uh-oh!  It looks like the sensors missed that destroyer behind you!  The Hammer-Polisher cranks the guns to 11, McGuyver style, while Hngh! sends back telemetry data from his torpedo mount.

The crew is SUPER-EFFECTIVE!  They do enough damage to the enemy (in a single exchange) to immediately board.  But first they must dodge that sippery destroyer.  They succeed (with just a little mishap-ery) and proceed to close in to board the battleship.  Meanwhile, Hngh!'s torpedo has flown through an open (broken) window on the bridge, and he hits his head on the ceiling, knocking him on his ass.  He pulls his gun and fires at the fanciest man he can find (and succeeds), who turns out to be the ship's magician.  A dove flies out of his wound.  Back on the Caterpillar, the crew readies the boarding pods, and The Hammer-Polisher mistakenly gives his pet chimp a block of C4.  Tungsten the chimp blows himself up, along with many other pirates.  How sad.

Regardless of setbacks, the crew successfully sends its boarders over.  They meet some marines upon arrival, but Turquoise Jacket bypasses them with the angry mob she has assembled and heads for the control room.  Nokia Qwest-Lockheed (who sent his flunky over in his place, along with his floating robot eye) jacks into a marine and guns down several more.  Hammer-Polisher throws his auto-hammer into the fray, and rigs up a downed marine's gun as a turret.  The marines hadn't a chance.  Turquoise Jacket arrives at the control room, and throws her mob into a frenzy, they defeat the hapless door guard and storm the room.  Inside Turquoise proceeds to force the control-room-ers to get very drunk, probably to screw up all the systems aboard ship.

On the bridge, Hngh! sees the admiral (who has been endowed with an irrational fear of vaccuum) rushing down a hallway.  Hngh! shoots out a nearby window, sucking them both out into space.  The admiral's re-breather and epaulets are stolen, and he is Falcon Kicked out and away, only to thud into the side of the destroyer.  Nokia begins hacking the destroyer's computer systems, while Hngh! races back to the bridge and charges up the experimental Yamato gun.  Concurrently, Nokia flubs his hack and launches all the destroyer's torpedos and Hngh! fires the Yamato gun, draining every single iota of power from the battleship.  The massive gun blast daisy-chains an explosion of torpedos and utterly destroys the destroyer, while a suffocating admiral Enron Hewlett-Packard rides the shockwave, screaming noiselessly.  As the power drains, one of the drunk idiots down in the control room pulls the "eject control room and plasma core" lever, and Turquoise Jacket barely leaps through the blast doors in time to save herself.  The pirates have won their first battleship, but it is completely drained of power and control.  How fittingly hilarious.

What Happened Around the Table
This session flowed much more cleverly than the previous one.  I give the credit to the Skull Boxes, which were not a part of the game as of the first playtest.  The spotlight naturally switched from one pirate to the other, leaving no one out, which was quite satisfying.  Accidents were, again, a huge part of the story.  They created most of the interesting wrinkles that developed in the fiction.  In addition, this session I began complicating low successes far more than I had previously, and it was incredibly fun.  It got to the point where the other players were requesting complications to add to their successes.  That's how much fun they were.  There were a few minor math oddities that I noticed during play (and will probably revise), but they didn't break the game at all.  The other players barely noticed or commented on them.

I achieved more insight on the Skull Box mechanic and on the promotion mechanics during this session.  The Skull Boxes not only move the spotlight, but also nudge players into performing actions that do not seem obvious, but create more interesting fiction.  The big stompy man can't keep shooting things over and over; he is forced to use his "non-shooty" die when the shooty one is in the Skull Box.  It created some really great stuff. 

In addition, I realized that the promotion mechanics allow pirates to min-max the ever-loving crap out of their (minimal) stats, and that's OK.  Since the most common way to get promoted is by having accidents, being too good at anything actually slows down your advancement.  It encourages players to keep their stats at a level where they can still fail.  Also, having a high target on a stat means that you are more likely to roll under by a larger margin, thus increasing the likelyhood of complications accompanying your success.  I think the promotion and die mechanics balance each other quite well.

And if You Have Some Free Time
I recorded about 95% of our session and you can listen to it here.  It begins with the crew looking for the secret transmitter that the Royal Spy had hidden on the Caterpillar.  Be warned, not only is it two hours long, but it is also full of tangents about such things as: cats presenting, can there be raw ham?, the Penn State scandal, modem dubstep, and many others.  My group loves to bullshit and talk over each other, but the tone of the game really comes across, and you can hear some fun stuff.  If you're like me and love listening to actual plays (The Walking Eye in particular), you may enjoy listening to this.

Thanks everyone!

Good stuff! I'll check out the play recording soon.

I'm setting up a playtest soon for this game. Are there any insights you've gained from the playtests you've run that would help?

This looks to be a fun game, and I'm excited to try it.

Awesome!  Thanks for being a playtester!

My best piece of advice for running the game is this: make the pirates' die rolls consequential.  If they succeed, their success becomes an important part of the fiction.  If they fail, their accident becomes an important part of the fiction, and usually creates a new wrinkle.  The players are assigning stakes to things by deciding to roll.  Without a roll there is never anything at stake.  If you make all rolls consequential, it drives play to really fun places.

Oh, and here are the slightly revised versions of the rules and character sheets, and the skull box sheet for good measure.

Thanks, Kyle!  I am super excited for you to test this.

This is a different question than the one in the opening post, but this is the concept that I have been obsessing over for the last few days: consequence.  I feel that every time dice are rolled, the resultant action should have consequence, be it positive or negative.  I know this is not a new concept by any means, but it has been popping out at me in other games that don't specifically employ it. 

For instance, I am currently in a DFRPG (Dresden Files) game, and one of the players decided to roll resources to fill up his truck with gas.  This seems like an obvious "Say yes or roll the dice" scenario, but it got me thinking.  While I love DFRPG and FATE in general, you can roll the dice and have it mean virtually nothing.  Yes, your truck is full of gas.  And yes, you can pay for it.  But that does nothing to drive the fiction forward.  (It might in a zombie survival game, I guess.)

  Or, take this example: my character, a sasquatch, decides to punch a ghost in the face, and I roll terribly.  All that happens is that I don't punch a ghost in the face.  My roll has the same effect as if I had stood still doing nothing.  Upon failure, my roll had no consequence.

All of this led me to write the following little chunk for the RA (GM, if you prefer) section of Caterpillar.  It's not yet in the linked version.

Die Rolls and Consequence
Players roll dice not only to bring a random element to the game, but also to show what is important.  If a player says, “My guy goes and eats some fish and chips,” he probably doesn't roll any dice.  Why would he?  He's just having his lunch.  But what if the pirate's player says, “I'm going to roll Eatery to eat some fish and chips”?  Do you say no?  Of course not.
You see, the pirate's player has just communicated to you that eating fish and chips is somehow important.  He is spending a resource to accomplish a goal, even if it seems like a silly one.  If he rolls too high and has an accident, eating fish and chips will have made life harder for him.  If it is unimportant, how could it have any negative effect on him whatsoever?  The pirate has made his fish-eating consequential.  By rolling dice to do it, he has decided that whether he succeeds or fails, there will be consequences.
So what if he succeeds?  We know he'll have an accident if he fails, but how can fish and chips matter in the slightest?  It is up to you, the RA, to make it important.  This is your greatest responsibility: making the pirates' action consequential.  Maybe, by eating exceptionally well, the pirate impresses a new NPC, who (while offering congratulations) lets slip news of a fabulous space treasure.  It's your call.  But always make die rolls matter.  When a die is rolled, the player is giving his action consequence, and if he succeeds it is your job to make that a reality.

Hi Josh,

I think I can help with that question. In the final analysis, "consequence" is a humanocentric issue, I mean, as long as we're talking about stories. Something is consequential if it matters, changes things, for someone. (OK, it could be an alien, an animal, a cartoon anthropomorph; I'm using "human" here in terms of audience identification).

Even if the immediate visual concern is, "Oh no, does the mainmast snap!" (or mizzen or whatever it's called), the genuine concern is what that means to the character's safety and ability to proceed toward some end. It's not about the mainmast.

Therefore, let's focus on what is happening prior to the roll, not merely its consequences. This is what I'm always blathering about concerning conflict of interest. What is happening as established so far, often inadvertently or unexpectedly, which puts one or more character's existing interests in jeopardy?

For example, the rule in Sorcerer (a bit tacit, but there) is, when there's such a conflict, always roll. When there's not, never roll. The difficulty, or capability, or any other aspect of the immediate situation is absolutely irrelevant. If a character decides to bake a cake or build a fence in the middle of play, and no imaginable conflict of interest is involved, then go by the character's descriptors and say "Yes" or "No" to establish whether it happens.  But if there's a conflict of interest involved, then the dice must come out.

(Sorcerer is quite harsh and straightforward in this regard, whereas all of Vincent's game designs fiddle with this idea, teasing out new ways to establish such things, providing subroutines for instantly losing once in one, and other nuances.)

You were actually right onto this when you felt a little twinge, while typing, and clarified that filling one's tank with gas is a conflict if this is about getting away from zombies, but not if ... well, if not. That's exactly correct. The in-fiction fact that the physical actions are identical in each case is a distraction, and it must be abandoned. If possible, taken out back and shot.

I do not claim to be a good advisor for Poison'd, as I have not yet played it successfully, but my current thinking is that it would be a very flaccid way to play by saying, out of the blue, "Conflict! Roll! Yeah! I got it! Uhhh ... what does that mean, again?" And then to hunt around for consequences in order to make it important.

Let me know if this makes any sense to you.

Best, Ron

Thanks, Ron.  After two read-throughs I think I see your point(s).  Let me see if I understand what you're saying.

In order for a character's action to have consequence, the action must have some bearing on the character's interests in some way.  That may be safety, life goals, or what have you.  So if, perhaps, in the quoted text, the pirate eating fish and chips has an allergy to seafood and wants to prove something, that action should be consequential.  If his player is merely looking for an excuse to roll dice (to try for a promotion via one more accident, or to get the dice back for the other players, maybe) then his action would not be consequential, and therefore not be deserving of a die roll.  Is that pretty close?

If so, let me follow up with another question.  Would this be an idea likely clarified with a task v. intent clarification in the rules?  In the same example, the pirate wants to roll to eat his fish and chips, and the RA asks the player to clarify what his intent is.  This would inherently answer the question of consequence, wouldn't it?  If the player really wants to roll, he'll need to make eating more than just a task.

I ask because I'm looking for a happy medium through which the players get to assign consequence to their actions simply by picking up the dice.  When they go to the dice, they know that this roll will matter.  It's a piece of authority that is often left up to the GM (who often lets it go by unnoticed, as his plate is pretty full already), and I'd like to mechanically allow the players choose what is consequential.  Is there another game out there that does this (maybe even one I've played, but missed this aspect)?

Hi Josh,

I’ll do something a little out of character for me and get picky with your phrasing as my way to reply. That’s because you are very close and it might be helpful to see your own words “shaved” a little.

In order for a character's action to have consequence, the action must have some bearing on the character's interests in some way.  That may be safety, life goals, or what have you.

So if, perhaps, in the quoted text, the pirate eating fish and chips has an allergy to seafood and wants to prove something, that action should be consequential.  If his player is merely looking for an excuse to roll dice (to try for a promotion via one more accident, or to get the dice back for the other players, maybe) then his action would not be consequential, and therefore not be deserving of a die roll.  Is that pretty close?

If so, let me follow up with another question.  Would this be an idea likely clarified with a task v. intent clarification in the rules?  In the same example, the pirate wants to roll to eat his fish and chips, and the RA asks the player to clarify what his intent is.  This would inherently answer the question of consequence, wouldn't it?  If the player really wants to roll, he'll need to make eating more than just a task.

I ask because I'm looking for a happy medium through which the players get to assign consequence to their actions simply by picking up the dice.  When they go to the dice, they know that this roll will matter.  It's a piece of authority that is often left up to the GM (who often lets it go by unnoticed, as his plate is pretty full already), and I'd like to mechanically allow the players choose what is consequential.  Is there another game out there that does this (maybe even one I've played, but missed this aspect)?

OK, I think I'm a bit closer to what you're saying, Ron.

The clarification of some character's interests is what made it click, I think.  Basically, the actions taken by characters are either a) relevant to the characters' interests in the game's fiction (SIS) and require a roll because of their inherent consequence, or b) a piece of color that may be enjoyable, but does not impact the interests of any character.  Option b should not require a roll because there are no inherent stakes for any of the characters.  How close is that?  8 out of 10?

So again, let me follow up with another question.  The mechanics in Caterpillar give importance to every failed roll (accident) by allowing the player to choose a roughly specified consequence from a list (the pirate gets hurt, a mishap befalls him, an ominous NPC arrives), or he can give the option to the RA (GM) who chooses from a similar but slightly different list.  From the playtests conducted so far, accidents are perhaps the strongest force of introducing new things into the fiction.  The intention is to give a possible negative consequence to every die roll and to give the "failing" player some new authorship, and it turns out to be very fun.  The question is: how important does a goal need to be to give it consequence when it succeeds?  Let me explain.

Tim is playing a very McGuyver-like pirate, and he has decided to modify his trusty, old hammer to make it "automatic".  He wants to go smash a marine's head in with the hammer, and make it extra effective.  He rolls Moddery to mod his hammer out.  There are (at least) two possible outcomes.  A) He succeeds.  His pirate's hammer is now automatic and will hurt a marine worse than before.  B) He has an accident and something ill befalls his pirate.  Is "I want my hammer to be more dangerous" truly consequential, or just cool?  Is it worth going to the dice?  There is an inherent risk with every roll, but does that undermine the possible success?

I see your point regarding the ass-ness of the example.  It sure doesn't help that I chose the stupidest possible thing to roll (on purpose) to try and illustrate it.  I didn't foresee the way it implicitly made the RA a dancing monkey for the players.  The real point I was trying to make is that the RA should not let a roll mean nothing when it succeeds.  I should probably specify something along the lines of "You are not the players' bitch.  They have to put some work in, too," to not confuse the point.  The players need real, fictional (not an oxymoron) reasons to do things that matter.  But if they do have their reasons, the GM should reciprocate by making the results of their actions matter.  Am I getting a little closer to the heart of the issue with this?

Thanks for your input, Ron.  I'm not as well-versed in Forge-talk as I probably should be, so I appreciate you taking the time to answer my questions and shed some light on some of these concepts.

Hey Josh,

A little more sanding and rubbing … although the work is much finer than it was a couple of posts ago, so I’m calling this successful so far.

...  Basically, the actions taken by characters are either a) relevant to the characters' interests in the game's fiction (SIS) and require a roll because of their inherent consequence, or b) a piece of color that may be enjoyable, but does not impact the interests of any character.  Option b should not require a roll because there are no inherent stakes for any of the characters.  How close is that?  8 out of 10?

…  From the playtests conducted so far, accidents are perhaps the strongest force of introducing new things into the fiction.  The intention is to give a possible negative consequence to every die roll and to give the "failing" player some new authorship, and it turns out to be very fun.  The question is: how important does a goal need to be to give it consequence when it succeeds? 

The real point I was trying to make is that the RA should not let a roll mean nothing when it succeeds.  I should probably specify something along the lines of "You are not the players' bitch.  They have to put some work in, too," to not confuse the point.  The players need real, fictional (not an oxymoron) reasons to do things that matter.  But if they do have their reasons, the GM should reciprocate by making the results of their actions matter.  Am I getting a little closer to the heart of the issue with this?

Thanks, man.  I think I have a good grasp on how to fit consequence into the game better than I did before.  And thanks for reading my game and giving some real feedback.  It's much appreciated.

Insofar as color is concerned, yes: it always, always becomes a true and solid part of the fiction.  Color can inform later decisions that will require rolls too, which creates more interesting options for the players (the GM included, of course). 

The example of the hammer modification in real life turned out to be a color decision as well.  Kind of.  Tim rolled for it and modded the hammer successfully, but the modification only gave him a fictional (color) benefit at the time, not a mechanical one.  Later in the game, the "automatic"-ness of his hammer came full circle and allowed him to do something he otherwise couldn't (an automatic hammer frantically banging around in a Jeffries tube to cause distraction).  That was the only real example I could think of from playtesting in which a roll was rolled without an immediate fictional consequence, and as such it stuck out.  Your #2 point regarding it was a good thought-provoker, and I think I have a better idea on how to handle it if it comes up again.

As far as Trollbabe is concerned, no I haven't played it.  It is on my (medium-length) list of indie games to read at the moment, along with Sorcerer, The Mountain Witch, and a couple of others.  I am a huge fan of "failure as a kind of success," so it may have to skip to the top of my list.  I have been gorging myself on Vincent's games in recent months (ever since Apocalypse World came out, really), and doing a lot of break-downing on the way he constructs his games.  Trollbabe may need a similar breakdown soon, it seems.

Hi Josh,

As I see it, you have an interesting decision regarding how to implement your core mechanic.  Where do you fall between (a) giving the players a magic button that they can go to at any time for consequences, and (b) making them roleplay until their fictional actions can be judged to have produced a conflict of interest?

I have two examples from other games that might be interesting to you.

Mendel S. ("wyrmwood" here) has a game in development called Space Cowboys of Independence, where, if I remember right, the core mechanic throws in-fiction causality out the window and acts as a pure story-advancer.  Fred's character's attempt to eat fish and chips could mean that bikers arrive on the spaceship.  "Bikers arrive" is established by random card draws and a look-up table.  I don't think it would be any great leap to add "Josh's character is attacked by his arch-nemesis" to that table, so that the consequence spotlight gets spread around regardless of which player tends to be the first to invoke the mechanic.

My other example is Apocalypse World.  Being the fiction-first enthusiast that I am, I simply tried to have my character pursue his interests, and when the MC told me to roll something, I rolled.  So, how was it determined when I'd receive mechanics-derived consequences?  It was determined by Vincent's design for what sorts of narrative occurrences* get you mechanics-derived consequences, as interpreted by the MC.  That is, I have my character do something risky; the MC says, "I think that qualifies as acting under fire"; and Vincent says that when a character acts under fire, here are the possible outcomes, and here's how you use dice, stats, and judgment to arrive at one.

Several of my fellow players, however, chose a very different approach.  Realizing that rolling dice got them guaranteed consequences (as well as spotlight time), they would often simply look at the Basic Moves sheet, pick the Move corresponding to their highest stat, and say (e.g.), "I try to manipulate him!"  As per the game's instructions and goals, the MC and I would jump in and say, "Okay, how?"  And if the player couldn't answer, we denied them the roll.  But they could usually answer.

I'm not trying to make a particular point here.  As you're deciding what sorts of results you want, and which approaches will best produce them, I just hope these anecdotes might be useful!  Caterpillar sounds fun.

Oh, a final note!  I can't tell if you have or had any impulse to use mechanics purely to generate color, but if so, I wouldn't rule those out.  I think Ron's example of rolling Moddery when you attack is nice, but generating extra color that could manifest in totally unexpected ways is also nice.  If I roll Moddery long before the attack, and the roll outcome establishes that my hammer glows blue with awesome energy... and then later, I want to sneak up on a guy in the dark, and I realize I can't, because my fucking hammer's glowing... I love that shit.

Ps,
-David

* in the context of this thread, think "fictional actions that also address conflicts of interest"

Hi David,

At the moment, I think the magic-button level of this game is about 7.  That's making Space Cowboys of Independence a 1, and making Apocalypse World a 10.  Here is my reasoning.  Rolling dice is a bit of a resource investment in the game because of how the Skull Boxes work.  Once you use a die, you might not get it back for a while, depending on the play speed of the other players.  Because of that, I feel that it's important to make every roll matter in the fiction.  To me, that means that pirates doing things that will make a potential impact on the story at large will roll dice.  But whatever they roll, the outcome is usually fictionally consistent.

The only time it won't be is when a pirate has an accident and chooses either a new and ominous NPC, or gives the RA the choice, at which point the RA chooses the arrival of enemies that threaten the crew.  Those choices introduce something completely unexpected.  They still make sense within the fiction, they just aren't caused by the fiction.  They're caused by the mechanics that were rolled because of the fiction.  At least that's what I've noticed so far in playtesting.  It's really quite fun.

I have to say, the way your friends roll in AW, that's me.  Or rather, that's me in D&D, Shadowrun, Mutants & Masterminds, etc.  That's actually the whole reason I got into indie games: they made me break my min-max habits, or rather, they just don't let me min-max at all.  If I can finally get someone to run Apocalypse World for me, I guess I'll find out if I've broken that habit, but I think I have.

Now as far as rolling to produce color goes: hell yes.  You're rolling to write in a new detail and you're going to make that detail important later on (if not, why did you roll in the first place?).  It's great!

I've been thinking on some of the advice here on this thread for a while, specifically about making the rolls in the game count.  So I decided to use some of Ron's advice to give the game a little more oomph in the consequence department.  Specifically, I changed the way a pirate chooses his Kitchen Sink when the game begins, with the hope that it will a) create actions that have more inherent consequence, and b) leave a pirate interesting options when he has just one die left to roll.  I didn't want to limit the Skulls a pirate can roll by making a comprehensive list, as making up names for one's own Skulls is a fun part of the experience.  I did, however, want to limit the starting sink options to drive play forward from the outset.Here's the new list of basic Skulls that a pirate can choose from to pick a Sink at character creation.

1. Asshattery: being an asshat
2. Avoidery: getting out of bad situations
3. Ballsery: jumping head-first into dangerous situations
4. Bombery: blowing stuff up with explosives and the like
5. Chancery: having more luck than the average human (my personal favorite)
6. Clevery: outsmarting other humans
7. Impactery: creating a lasting impression with other humans
8. Mockery: making fun of other humans
9. Patchery: applying a quick-and-dirty fix to a bad situation
10. Persistery: never giving up, no matter what
11. Punchery: hitting things (not limited to punching)
12. Riggery: jury-rigging broken or malfunctioning gizmos
13. Shootery: shooting things (not limited to guns)
14. Sneakery: sneaking around and hiding without being seen
15. Thievery: stealing things
16. Trickery: fooling other humans
17. Traitery: backstabbing the humans who trust you
18. Vackery: doing things out in a vacuum (usually in a space suit.)
19. Wackery: being utterly unpredictable

It could just be the phrasing, but some of these sound like outcomes witch certain impact, while others sound like attempts that could succeed or fail.  Like, unless the game is forcing other characters to give up, Persistery sounds merely like a descriptive character trait.  Whereas Avoidery sounds like, well, every character gets in bad situations, and mine is particularly good at getting out, and I'll expect that to manifest mechanically at some point.

I hope I'm not nit-picking and missing the point here.  If I am, please ignore me.

Not nit-picky at all!  I see what you're saying with Persistery.  It does seem a little more trait-like upon a second look.  Are there any others that jump out at you?  Since I wrote them, I see them in my head a little differently than the way they probably appear to the reader.  But the other ones that seem similar are Chancery, Wackery, and perhaps Impactery and Ballsery to a lesser extent.  Are you seeing a similar disconnect?  Thanks for the feedback!

I think I'm getting close to a complete draft of this game.  In the spirit of stealing from the best, I snagged the "end of the game" concept from Poison'd.  I really like how Vincent laid out a distinct ending for his game based on certain conditions, so I adapted the same concept to fit this one.

The end conditions I've come up with are a bit different from Poison'd, and come in two different parts of the book: the more complicated rules for pirates, and the end of the RA's section, concerning pirate death.  Here they are in that order.

7. The Pirate King Rule: If you are the first pirate to achieve the rank of Pirate King, your pirate gets to engineer the end of the game.  First, you will be given your own pirate ship (not a submarine, like the Caterpillar) by the pirate council.  Second, you are tasked with striking the final blow against the Royal Empire, to take care of them once and for all.  You will be given your choice of crew, and all the resources at the pirate council's disposal.  Whatever plan your pirate comes up with, that plan is the last mission of the game.  Whether it succeeds or fails, the game will end once the mission is completed, and it will be amazing.  No pressure.

The Death of a Pirate
It is a sad and tragic day when a player's pirate goes the way of the dodo.  It is not a thing to be taken lightly.  It is kind of hard for a pirate to die in this game, but it very well might happen.  When the pirate's player has run out of Pieces of Eight and the pirate is caught in a cannon broadside, sometimes he dies.  What follows is the grieving process that a pirate's death requires, outlined for your solemn perusal.  Any number of the following stages of grief may be called for upon the death of one of The Terrible Butterflies.
1. The dead pirate can be resuscitated postmortem.  If there is a living pirate that can use Medicinery (the Earthling or the ship's surgeon, if there is one), that pirate can try some postmortem resuscitation.  It must be done quickly in order to succeed.  If the roll succeeds, the dead pirate comes back to life with his BoneTrack still full.  He cannot be resuscitated again if he dies a second time unless he has completely emptied his BoneTrack first. 
2. The dead pirate's player can demand a funeral.  If a funeral is called for, it must take place.  The pirate's body is loaded into an empty torpedo and placed into a torpedo tube.  The other pirates must then, one at a time, share their most cherished memories of the dead pirate. The dead pirate's player may request any one of the memories be written on his death torpedo.  Captain Swallowtail, through the RA, gets the last word in the memory sharing.  The captain vows that the dead pirate's torpedo will be the first to be fired at the next enemy ship they find.  And so the Caterpillar casts off again to hunt for their next plunder.
3. The dead pirate's player can swap places with the RA.  If everyone is in agreement, the dead pirate's player can step up and be the RA starting with the next game session, and the current RA can choose to create a pirate of her own.  This new pirate will start as a swabbie, and, as her player wishes, she may be a pre-existing member of the crew or a new recruit.
4. The dead pirate's player can call for the end of the game.  If the dead pirate's player is too sad to continue without his beloved pirate, he can declare the game to be over at the conclusion of the current session.  This puts some pressure on the crew to finish the game in style.  In order to properly end the game, all the pirates are required to take the biggest risks they can possibly take.  If all the pirates are dead by the end of the session, then the game was a good one.  If they succeed against all odds, then the game was a good one.  There can be no half measures taken at the end of the game.  The game must end boldly and proudly so the players can hold their heads high.

Josh wrote: I see what you're saying with Persistery.  It does seem a little more trait-like upon a second look.  Are there any others that jump out at you?

7. The Pirate King Rule: If you are the first pirate to achieve the rank of Pirate King, your pirate gets to engineer the end of the game.  First, you will be given your own pirate ship (not a submarine, like the Caterpillar) by the pirate council.  Second, you are tasked with striking the final blow against the Royal Empire, to take care of them once and for all.  You will be given your choice of crew, and all the resources at the pirate council's disposal.  Whatever plan your pirate comes up with, that plan is the last mission of the game.  Whether it succeeds or fails, the game will end once the mission is completed, and it will be amazing.  No pressure.

The Death of a Pirate. . .
The other pirates must then, one at a time, share their most cherished memories of the dead pirate. The dead pirate's player may request any one of the memories be written on his death torpedo.  . . .
If everyone is in agreement, the dead pirate's player can step up and be the RA starting with the next game session, and the current RA can choose to create a pirate of her own.  . . .

4. The dead pirate's player can call for the end of the game.

Josh wrote:
7. The Pirate King Rule: If you are the first pirate to achieve the rank of Pirate King, your pirate gets to engineer the end of the game.  First, you will be given your own pirate ship (not a submarine, like the Caterpillar) by the pirate council.  Second, you are tasked with striking the final blow against the Royal Empire, to take care of them once and for all.  You will be given your choice of crew, and all the resources at the pirate council's disposal.  Whatever plan your pirate comes up with, that plan is the last mission of the game.  Whether it succeeds or fails, the game will end once the mission is completed, and it will be amazing.  No pressure.

Josh wrote:
The Death of a Pirate
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Any number of the following stages of grief may be called for upon the death of one of The Terrible Butterflies.
1. The dead pirate can be resuscitated postmortem.  If there is a living pirate that can use Medicinery (the Earthling or the ship's surgeon, if there is one), that pirate can try some postmortem resuscitation.  It must be done quickly in order to succeed.  If the roll succeeds, the dead pirate comes back to life with his BoneTrack still full.  He cannot be resuscitated again if he dies a second time unless he has completely emptied his BoneTrack first. 
2. The dead pirate's player can demand a funeral.  If a funeral is called for, it must take place.  The pirate's body is loaded into an empty torpedo and placed into a torpedo tube.  The other pirates must then, one at a time, share their most cherished memories of the dead pirate. The dead pirate's player may request any one of the memories be written on his death torpedo.  Captain Swallowtail, through the RA, gets the last word in the memory sharing.  The captain vows that the dead pirate's torpedo will be the first to be fired at the next enemy ship they find.  And so the Caterpillar casts off again to hunt for their next plunder.
3. The dead pirate's player can swap places with the RA.  If everyone is in agreement, the dead pirate's player can step up and be the RA starting with the next game session, and the current RA can choose to create a pirate of her own.  This new pirate will start as a swabbie, and, as her player wishes, she may be a pre-existing member of the crew or a new recruit.
4. The dead pirate's player can call for the end of the game.  If the dead pirate's player is too sad to continue without his beloved pirate, he can declare the game to be over at the conclusion of the current session.  This puts some pressure on the crew to finish the game in style.  In order to properly end the game, all the pirates are required to take the biggest risks they can possibly take.  If all the pirates are dead by the end of the session, then the game was a good one.  If they succeed against all odds, then the game was a good one.  There can be no half measures taken at the end of the game.  The game must end boldly and proudly so the players can hold their heads high.

Awesome.  Thanks David.  I sincerely appreciate your feedback.

I understand more clearly now your points about the starting list of Skulls.  Attempts vs. outcomes is a good way of explaining it.  I have to say that I really love Ballsery, but it may need some tweaking or might even need to be let go.  Now what if, instead of Griefery, Mockery was described as "making other humans feel bad about themselves"?  Would that be enough to assign more of an outcome-based view of it.

Now Vackery is kind of a special case.  It seems inherently dangerous (to non-astronaut me) to be doing anything out in space in a space suit, so I can see the inherent consequence of it.  But it might indeed be too circumstantial.  When we've been playtesting the game, the pirates are in space suits all the time, boarding ships and the like.  But since there's so much setting left vague (on purpose), other groups might not ever end up using space suits at all.  I suppose I want it in there to actually reveal little bits of "what you do in the game world" stuff without spelling out the setting.  I just want the rules to imply it so that the players can fill in the blanks.  Also, the Rocket (one of the four kinds of pirates) has a whole special thing about Vackery and doing things while floating in space, so I wanted to make sure the game has the territory to go there.

Now about this part.

I assume that if my character gets a funeral and I want to keep playing with the same RA, then I make a new swabbie, right?

Giving one player the option to dictate that is pretty ballsy.  Are you comfortable with the "most bored person trumps most enthused people" value here?

Josh wrote: I really love Ballsery, but it may need some tweaking or might even need to be let go.

Josh wrote: Now what if, instead of Griefery, Mockery was described as "making other humans feel bad about themselves"?

Josh wrote: Now Vackery is kind of a special case.  It seems inherently dangerous . . . I suppose I want it in there to actually reveal little bits of "what you do in the game world" stuff without spelling out the setting.

Josh wrote:

I assume that if my character gets a funeral and I want to keep playing with the same RA, then I make a new swabbie, right?

This is something I'm very conflicted about.  My gut reaction is "no", and I'll tell you why.  In too many (D&D type) games, when you re-roll a new character (of the same class, specifically) to replace a dead one, that character turns into Dead Character 2.  He's just like the first guy, and he gets played the same.

Josh wrote: Now, if the game had three pirates from the outset, and the dead pirate's player could choose the one he didn't play before, that would sit perfectly with me.  He would almost certainly create a distinct and different character from the one that just died.  I should probably write this all into the rules somewhere, but it seems very clunky.

What's your objection to that?  I can't really weigh in until I know where you're coming from on this.

3) If the player of a dead pirate wants to play a new character, they must invent a new planet/type, and there are rules and guidelines for that

1. Asshattery: offending other humans by being an asshat
2. Avoidery: getting out of bad situations
3. Ballsery: succeeding in situations which no sane human would dare attempt
4. Bombery: blowing stuff up with explosives and the like
5. Chancery: having more luck than the average human
6. Clevery: outsmarting other humans
7. Deepery: successfully navigating/staying sane in The Deeps
8. Impactery: creating a lasting impression with other humans
9. Mockery: making other humans feel bad about themselves (NPCs and pirates both)
10. Patchery: applying a quick-and-dirty fix to a bad situation
11. Punchery: hitting things (not limited to punching)
12. Riggery: jury-rigging broken or malfunctioning gizmos
13. Shootery: shooting things (not limited to guns)
14. Sneakery: sneaking around and hiding without being seen
15. Thievery: stealing things
16. Trickery: fooling other humans
17. Traitery: backstabbing the humans who trust you
18. Vackery: maneuvering gracefully out in the vaccuum (usually in a space suit)

First off, I would like to express how awesome this game sounds. It was a pleasure to read, being the right mix of hilarious and informative about the ruleset. However, I have a few observations, and I hope you dont feel like I'm going out of the scope of your original questions.

1) The whole Bones section is very confusing to me. I feel like I understand the concept of what you're trying to accomplish (if you roll a Bone and the die lands on the number that you have pips filled in, you take damage), but it seems completely abstract until you look at a character sheet. Maybe it's just me,but it's a bit irritating that I have to look away from the ruleset and look at a character sheet to make sense of it. So either the rules need to be reworded, or I'm just a dummy, or perhaps the rules should be reworded so that dummies like me can understand it.

2) I'm curious about why you made a decision to only have the class descriptions of the character sheets. I'm also curious about why you would want characters to choose their homeworld before before being able to receive a sheet. To me, either of those would be workable, but there seems to be an inherent problem to include them both.

Let me explain my thoughts. It seems like your decision to have the class descriptions only on the character sheet effectively makes it so you have a rulebook without a complete ruleset, particularly because you explain in the Skulls section about different classes having different potential Skulls, and then you don't elaborate until the character sheets. Even so, not that big of a deal, it just requires going back and forth between the rules and the character sheets.

Now about the mechanic of not being able to receive a sheet until you declare your homeworld... I think I understand your motivation for this. I think that you included this so that people will just play what they think sounds cool rather than min-maxing. It also makes it so that you can get a character to create a little bit of background before he starts his mechanical decisions. Neither are bad reasons.

However, consider this. If you declare that players cannot receive character sheets until they determine their homeworlds, there are a couple of different scenarios that can happen. Either a player hasn't played the game before and they dont know the specifics of a given class, which means all they have to go on is "Earthlings were born on Earth. They are old and wise. Primers were born on Earth Prime. They are strong and tough. Fairies were born on Fairweather. They are tricky and techno-savvy. Rockets were born on floating space rocks. They are self-reliant and machine-minded." These descriptions are minimal to the point where a player could choose a homeworld, and end up not liking his character because he doesn't have abilities he might want. Essentially, he cant get a character sheet until he chooses his character, and he has to choose his character without learning what it can do. The alternative is a player who has already played the game and knows what each class can do, in which case, it doesn't matter whether he's gotten a character sheet yet, because he can already inform his choice. It seems like the only thing this rule does is hinder the ability for a new player to make a meaningful choice about what kind of character he wants to play.

3) Why the artificial limit on the characters? Why does each player have to play a different class? In my estimation,having two Primers wouldn't upset the game. The only meaningful change I can think of is that there is more likely to be a greater emphasis on combat. I get that you want every character to be able to shine, and having two characters of the same class means that during certain situations, they might have to share the spotlight, but shouldn't that be a secondary concern to players being able to play the characters they want? Especially considering the fact that the spotlight doesn't stay on any one character for long on account of the Skull Box (which is an ingenious rule and I wish I had thought of it), I'm not sure what the One-Pirate-Per-Homeworld limit is trying to accomplish.

I know I said I liked the idea game, so I apologize for what must just look like a litany of complaints. I'm just not a good enough wordsmith to be able to say all the above things succinctly.

Thanks, DPrim for your awesome feedback.  I really appreciate the time you took to respond so thoroughly.  It's great to hear.  So let's break this down, shall we?

1) I am so glad you said this.  The Bones section is confusing, I know.  Or at least I suspected it.  The issue I'm having with explaining this concept is mostly based on the fact that it's a purely visual thing that I'm trying to communicate with words.  There's nothing to write down, no numbers, just coloring in a picture.  Since you brought this up, I think I'm going to go back and apply some education theory to that section.  Put in some step by step pictorial instructions perhaps.  Or is it more the abstract nature of what Bones are that is confusing?  Does the section need more of an explanation of what the roll means?  It's basically a means of determining how much damage you soak.  If you roll Bones, you were hit in some way, it just tells you how much that hit hurt you, if at all.

2) With regard to class descriptions and character sheets, you brought up one thing I'd thought of and one I hadn't even considered.  First off, I am just kind of lazy and haven't yet ported the character stats and powers and stuff over to the book proper.  I am planning to do it soon, but I have to get off my ass and get it done.  It will probably be its own section after the rules for regular pirates and before the RA section.

Now the whole "pick your character before you look at the sheet" thing is something I didn't even realize my text was implying.  That totally missed me.  I kind of figured that everyone would hear the descriptions, look over the sheets as a group and people would snatch the ones they liked.  That's pretty much how it went in my playtest group.  But knowing the way it might sound, I should probably rephrase that little paragraph a bit.

3) Now this question is my favorite.  And that's because I have a real answer to it.  I'll start off with a question of my own, though.  Have you ever played Apocalypse/Dungeon World?  There is a similar idea in those games that's stated a little differently.  It basically says, "There may be other people who [do what your character does] but there is only one [name of character class]: you."  That's what I'm going for.  There will be many other Primers and Fairies and such, but you are the only one that matters.

Thinking of other class-based systems, the go-to is always D&D.  And in D&D, while it does occasionally happen, most of the time no one doubles up on character classes.  It's easier in newer editions to spread out among the classes, as there are like 20, but even in old school, Rules Cyclopedia D&D (where there are perhaps 6 or 7) nobody tends to double up.  BUT, you can do it and it works when you do it.  I think the reason why is important.  In D&D there are SO MANY OPTIONS at every stage of char-gen that two fighters can operate mechanically in totally different ways.  In this game, though, the options are far more limited.  Every last character option fits on a single, double-sided sheet of paper.  This is important.

Two guys may choose to play Primers (in glorious defiance of the rules), and while creating their pirates they make sure to go for differing options from each other.  They choose different Skull options, different Sinks, different Stuff.  When the game begins, they are both fighty-men, but they have different mechanical choices to make.  As the game progresses and they get promoted they will get to improve their pirates, up to, perhaps, 14 promotions.  This is where the low-options element becomes more important.  In order to keep their pirates mechanically separate, they have to avoid choosing new pieces of Stuff that the other guy has.  When they get the options to rename their Sinks or add new ones, they need to be careful not to spread into the other guy's territory.  When they do, their pirates, while possibly remaining different in terms of role-play style, become more and more mechanically similar.

Now for me this is a bad thing.  That does not mean it will be a bad thing for every group of players.  But it would be for mine.  And, I'm sure, it would be for many others.  The restriction is there to avoid mechanically similar characters, sure.  But it's also in place to leave a pirate's promotion options open for the future.  It's not as much fun to promote your pirate when you don't want to choose certain options because your friend's character already has them.  Each pirate has his own schtick, and it's a fairly narrow one.  That's my two cents, anyway. 

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Seriously man, thanks a lot for all your feedback.  That's really the kind of stuff I was looking for from the first post, especially the Bones stuff.  I'm adding a couple of things to the game right now (mostly a mission-prep system for the RA), and I'll throw in some revisions to address the things you suggested as well.  I'll post a new link up on this thread once it's all written down, and I'd appreciate your feedback again once things have been reworded a bit.  Thanks!